I have a new friend these days ,（but bot very good ），her name is Marry .She is very clever but very piquant(调皮的）.Althought I ask many knowledgeable people that what ways can make her quiet ,but nobody can answerd this question .So I'm very sad ,Because I repersent my friends to make her quiet and I don't want to let them down .
Luckily ,one day ,a person called me and said that he came up with some suggestions to make Mary quiet .I'm very happy .But these aren't very useful,because she refused our help .So we're very angry .
Mary is not quiet so she is very fluke(倒霉的）.Once ,she was playing with fire ,we asked that playing with fire are very dangerous ,but she said we were nor correct ,she thinks is an interesting thing . Everyone prays that she won't burn herselt ,but this not true .
The shelf was burned ,and it burned Mary's knee .She feels some pain and she can't go downstairs ,few minutes later ,we know that Mary was hurt .So we went upstairs very quickly and we heard that Mary was crying .
First ,we have offerd her some help,and we had first-aid .Then,we took some sands to cover the fire .The fire was died.
A few minutes later ,the nearby hospital's dactors were coming ,they took Mary into hospital and some of us were stay with her ,and the rest were finding her parents .
This is a vey dangerous event ,so Mary is very quiet now .
And now everyone treats Mary as best friend!
I doesn't want to let them down . _____ I don't want to let them down.
she refuse our help ------She refused our help.
she was play with fire ,we asked she that play with fire are very dangerous ,-----She was playing with the fire, we asked that playing with fire is very dangerous.
but she said we are not correct ----She said we were nor correct.时态前后要一致。
she think is a interesting thing ------She thinks it is an interesting thing.
Everyone was pray ----Everyone prays
She feel some pain.-------She feels/felt some pain.
So we go upstairs very quickly and we heard that Mary was crying .-----we went
we have offer helpful to Mary -----offer是动词have 是助动词 offered 后加名词做宾语helpful 是形容词。应该为： We have offered her some help .
we had a first-aid -----first-aid是形容词，不能用a 来修饰。
hospital's dactors was coming -----doctors 是复数，后用are/were
Mary are very quiet now -----Mary 是单数，应用is.
I have a new friend these days ,（but bot very good ），her name is Marry .She is very clever but very piquant(调皮的）.Althought I ask many knowledgeable people that what ways can make her quiet ,but nobody can answerd this question .So I'm very sad ,Because I repersent my friends to make her quiet and I doesn't want to let them down .
Luckily ,one day ,a person called me and said that he came up with some suggestions to make Mary quiet .I'm very happy .But these aren't very useful,because she refuse our help .So we're very angry .
Mary is not quiet so she is very fluke(倒霉的）.Once ,she was play with fire ,we asked she that play with fire are very dangerous ,but she said we are not correct ,she think is a interesting thing . Everyone was pray that she won't burn herselt ,but this not true .
The shelf was burned ,and it burned Mary's knee .She feel some pain and she can't go downstairs ,few minutes later ,we know that Mary was hurt .So we go upstairs very quickly and we heard that Mary was crying .
First ,we have offer helpful to Mary,and we had a first-aid .Then,we took some sands to cover the fire .The fire was died.
A few minutes later ,the nearby hospital's dactors was coming ,they took Mary into hospital and some of us were stay with her ,and the rest were finding her parents .
This is a vey dangerous event ,so Mary are very quiet now .
And now everyone treats Mary as best friend!
